There is something wrong with this town it seems like a book wanting to be opened and my plan was to be the person to do that. Not a lot of people have faith in me but there is one person that has all ways been there right from the beginning he has all ways gave me hope that i could be me the person i am ment to be. We moved to this town i had the feeling that something was wrong. When i started at my new school its was like i was the only person there. My classes where silent no one person talked to me but there was this one guy his name was Alex but every one called him moose because that was his last name he was really sweet and he talked to me he was also a football player but that didn’t matter he was nice.
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I love that first sentence; it really drew me in. I like this experimental, run-on sentence type of style. The only thing is it really feels like the beginning of a much-longer piece so I was wondering if this was an introduction of sorts.
I love that first sentence; it really drew me in! I like this experimental, run-on sentence type of style. The only thing is it really feels like the beginning of a much-longer piece so I was wondering if this was an introduction of sorts.
I love that first sentence; it really drew me in. I like this experimental, run-on sentence type of style. The only thing is it really feels like the beginning of a much-longer piece so I was wondering if this was an introduction of sorts; I would love to read more of this story if so.
I love that first sentence; it really drew me in. I like this experimental, run-on sentence type of style. The only thing is it really feels like the beginning of a much-longer piece so I was wondering if this was an introduction of sorts. I would love to read more if so!
This is a really sweet story. But I do challenge you to fix the run-on sentences. For example, you could change the first sentence to “there is something wrong with this town; it seems like a book wanting to be opened, and my plan was to be the person to do that.”
Imagine saying the sentence out loud- and time you pause, put a comma, semi colon, or period.