Blue little lights
float around as I lay.
Long sleepless nights.
I wanted you to stay.
Green little hands
Hold my heart in place.
To keep it from falling.
So that it won’t break.
White little faces
Stay with me when I wake.
They stay to remind me to smile.
They don’t even take.
They don’t even care.
They are here for me.
I just wish you were there.
Poetry
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Though the speaker here is missing someone, this poem feels calm and quiet – almost soothing. I think the colors – blue, green, white – really help build the imagery, and the repetition of “little” adds a nice sound. I only have one suggestion. When I read this aloud, my instinct isn’t to pause towards the end in the way I think you want us to – in a manner that puts the emphasis on the final rhyme care/there. This is just my opinion, but I would space the piece like this:
Blue little lights
float around as I lay.
Long sleepless nights.
I wanted you to stay.
Green little hands
Hold my heart in place.
To keep it from falling.
So that it won’t break.
White little faces
Stay with me when I wake.
They stay to remind me to smile –
They don’t even take.
They don’t even care.
They are here for me –
I just wish you were there.
Of course, this is just a suggestion – other readers could disagree. Great poem!