Calling him my Lord loving him is not
hard. He’s giving me what I need. I could say
he’s my security. I remember day one and when
we had our first son. This man is so much fun,
he’s kinda like having warmth from the sun. I know
that we have won. I love the way he looks at
me it kinda makes me feel free. I need him the way
he needs me, We are better together we meet each other’s needs.
Poetry
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I challenge you to challenge yourself. Branch out and write something that doesn’t involve God.
This piece is actually about my husband.
How about . . . she is aloud to have freedom of speech. Good piece, LadyPoet!
Thanks Gen1900
Lady,
I love the theme of your poem. It is a little hard to read since it is really not in a poetic format.
I would separate the lines to read something like:
Calling him my Lord
loving him is not hard.
He’s giving me what I need.
I could say
he’s my security.
I remember day one
and when we had our first son.
This man is so much fun,
he’s kinda like having
warmth from the sun.
I know that we have won.
I love the way he looks at me
it kinda makes me feel free.
I need him the way
he needs me,
we are better together
we meet each other’s needs.
Just an idea for presentation, obviously there are many different ways to format your poetry. If you eliminate words that are not needed like and and kinda. it will read much better, It is a beautiful poem and I can feel the love…this makes me feel great after a rough day. Thank you for sharing your talent and your poetry.
Thanks awesome! help I love it.
Beautifully worded and written and I guess maybe each to their own interpretation, thanks for sharing.