This poem has great potential. Yet, I defiantly feel like this poem is unfinished. Especially with the last line, “for I am the chosen one”. How is the speaker the chosen one? What does it mean to be the chose one? How does this tie back to your main message in your piece? Answer those questions and your piece will strengthen significantly. Also, on a side note, make sure you go back and work on your grammar, There are easy mistakes, like not capitalizing your “I”s. However, this small mistake is distracting your reading from understanding the message of your story.
Other than those things. Your story was a nice read. Keep improving!
Sometimes when I write I prefer to leave it unfinished lol but I appreciate your opinion and you liking it as well
This poem has great potential. Yet, I defiantly feel like this poem is unfinished. Especially with the last line, “for I am the chosen one”. How is the speaker the chosen one? What does it mean to be the chose one? How does this tie back to your main message in your piece? Answer those questions and your piece will strengthen significantly. Also, on a side note, make sure you go back and work on your grammar, There are easy mistakes, like not capitalizing your “I”s. However, this small mistake is distracting your reading from understanding the message of your story.
Other than those things. Your story was a nice read. Keep improving!
Sometimes when I write I prefer to leave it unfinished lol but I appreciate your opinion and you liking it as well