do not ever treat depression
as if it is not serious
it is a matter that needs to
become understand
no one wants to feel alone
or less of a person
if you know someone who’s battling
depression or anxiety or bipolar
do not turn your back on them
help them
we are people just like everyone else
do not treat us any different
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This poem has a lot of potential! I love how you decided to write about an important topic. The speaker in this poem really shows how they care about people who are suffering from depression, anxiety, and bipolar. The speaker does a nice job wanting to stand up to people who are being poked fun at.
As for improvement. I want to see more from this piece. You do a lot of telling and not showing. What I believe could strengthen your work is by having the speaker observe this abuse. Another thing, I believe your poem will be strengthened if you created stanzas in your piece. You seem to jump around subjects, stanzas will help create an easy flow between a subject change.
Other than those things, you created an important piece here. Keep working on it. I want to see what you do with this.
Thank you more is coming
You can go so much further with this. Keep working on it. Give us some examples of what depression is like. I was recently diagnosed with mild depression. The medication helps and as a side benefit, I quit smoking.
Sure I would love to go further more into detail I can wait for you guys to see what I’m going to write next it gets very emotional