thank you for being cold with me
and for listening to me
and for understanding that you don’t need to try to fix me.
my lungs must hate me but you love me enough for both of us.
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Ohh I really enjoyed reading your poem. I think the message here is a speaker dealing with addiction to cigarettes. The last line, “my lungs must hate me but you love me enough for both of us”, lead me to believe this. I do suggest to go back and add more to your poem. Do not tell the reader about the speaker’s addiction, but show them through writing. I do suggest to keep the last line, but edit it a little. This poem was good, keep going!
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