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This was a really incredible piece. It’s filled with nationalistic pride and familial love. Your descriptions were vivid and artful, and I felt like I was in the stadium.
The only critique I would give his that I want more information about the relationship between Stevie and Mr. Tuxxy. If they hated working with each other so much, why didn’t Stevie get a different singing instructor? Spend some time in that scene, instead of summarizing the year Stevie spent with his voice couch, give me a specific example of what a session was like.
Thank you for your feedback. Because I am not an experienced writer I have a lot of uncertainties about character development. So advice on such things is very important, in my opinion. It seems to me that a villain can really make a story more engaging, but it is such an awkward and unfamiliar thing to try and incorporate into a story. I’m glad you were able to see that shortcoming. Your insight is definitely something I want to improve in the future. Without question that type of character interaction would improve the story.
It might help by not thinking of them as a villain, because everyone has something good in them, right? Think of them as the antagonist: someone who stops the protagonist from getting what they want, for some reason, for some amount of time. Think of someone in your own life who you don’t like? Why? What do they do that irritates you? What do they say? Now think about some of their redeeming features. Use your own life to personify your fiction.
This was a really incredible piece. It’s filled with nationalistic pride and familial love. Your descriptions were vivid and artful, and I felt like I was in the stadium.
The only critique I would give his that I want more information about the relationship between Stevie and Mr. Tuxxy. If they hated working with each other so much, why didn’t Stevie get a different singing instructor? Spend some time in that scene, instead of summarizing the year Stevie spent with his voice couch, give me a specific example of what a session was like.
Thank you for your feedback. Because I am not an experienced writer I have a lot of uncertainties about character development. So advice on such things is very important, in my opinion. It seems to me that a villain can really make a story more engaging, but it is such an awkward and unfamiliar thing to try and incorporate into a story. I’m glad you were able to see that shortcoming. Your insight is definitely something I want to improve in the future. Without question that type of character interaction would improve the story.
It might help by not thinking of them as a villain, because everyone has something good in them, right? Think of them as the antagonist: someone who stops the protagonist from getting what they want, for some reason, for some amount of time. Think of someone in your own life who you don’t like? Why? What do they do that irritates you? What do they say? Now think about some of their redeeming features. Use your own life to personify your fiction.