A waste of feelings
A waste of breathe
the last time we kissed
I felt death
my love for you is indescribable
there were nights I lay my head
down crying and praying
on the bible
hoping I can win you back
yet there is no coming back
Poetry
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This poem stirs up strong emotions. I absolutely love how your message and your title clash: the poem is all about how torn up the speaker is about this relationship ending, but the title is the polite thing to say during the break-up (through gritted teeth). Two quick little notes:
1. When referencing the Bible (the Christian text), it’s spelled with a capital B. This is to separate it from less formal how-to guides referred to as ‘bibles’.
2. The line “my love for you is indescribable” took me out of the poem. The entre rest of the poem is dedicated to the description of feelings of loss. Mentioning that something is beyond description feels weak.
Great job!