This is an interesting read because it calls into question the reliability of the narrator. They say they won’t mind if their lover hurts them but acknowledges that they will be hurt anyway. Is it worth it to be with a person that causes you to lose your integrity and push aside your feelings in place of being with them? Should we trust the narrator’s feelings?

I will say that your sentence structure needs a bit of work. As this is a poem, there are certain rules you need to follow to keep the flow of your words together. Remeber to capitalize your pronouns, such as “I”. You don’t need to put commas after “myself” in the 1st line and “friends” in the 2nd line because they are a continuation of the sentence as opposed to a sentence that could stand on its own.

At first, I questioned your choice of changing your poems format from double line spacing to no spacing but I feel like it accurately represents our subconscious thoughts. The last line especially speaks to our thoughts within thoughts. To further expand on this, I think you could add more to the poem, showing our dual feelings when making a decision.