Have you ever falling in love
but knew they didn’t care?
Have u ever felt like crying
and know it will would get u know where?
have u ever wacthed them walk away
not wanting to let them go,
\and whisper i love u so softly
not wanting to let them know?
you cried all night in misery
and almost went insane.
\there’s nothing in this world
that causes so much pain.
if i could chose between love or pain
I would rather die.
\Love is fun but it hurts to much and
the price u pay is to dam high so I
say don’t fall in love you’ll be hurt
before its through you see,my love you
ought to know i fell in love with you.
Poetry
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This is a nice free verse poem. You do very well with pauses in your poem and the lines sound very nicely together. However, I do suggest to go back and revise your poem. There are a lot of simple spelling and grammar errors. There are so many that it takes away the seriousness of the poem. Also, delete the curse word, “damn”. It makes the poem sound childish and not serious.
Again this is a really nice poem! I want to see what it looks like when you correct the errors!