Just because you said no
doesn’t mean I’ll never have you
Maybe in dreams know
maybe in thoughts view
Upon memories draw
Without something I’ll surely fall
Your saying no can never rid me of you
Like the ocean waves
One after another, they never end
so no matter what you say
I’ll always believe your love impend
Maybe the tomorrows
maybe the good times
Your saying no will never stay sorrows
As mountains from a distance
you believe eventually reach
Even time intense
Maybe the miles love beseech
In my mind you’ll always live
No ..can never impede
what thoughts and memories give!
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This is a nice interesting poem. I love the creepy feelings you have hear. I would work on this poem more. Add more allusions and also give us a reason why the person, “you”, is saying no to the speaker. What is the speaker asking? Answer those questions.
Thank you very much, I’ll look and try and find ways to better the poem.
This poem sorta reminds me of a person who is trying to hold on to a love one, but they are already dead and gone. I like the idea of this. But I do think this needs some work in the clarity department. I would say just step aside a couple of days and come back to it and you’ll see all your mistakes.
I think your right in one way about already gone and the clarity is a positive need I know, thanks.