The love I have for you will
last a life time
so strong
I don’t see nothing wrong
it happen so effortlessly
loving it because it feels real
whenever you need me
just give me a call
i will never let you fall
I’m the one you can depend on
for a lifetime
Poetry
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I don’t think this is how you meant it, but when I read it I got a sense of sibling love. Romantic love, while stronger and overwhelming, can be fleeting. But siblings love is something that is often undefined and unspoken, but you know that you’re connected by blood and childhood, and you’ll always be there for each other.
I recommend adding some punctuation in this poem. Adding periods and commas will force the reader to stop and take in important parts of the poem longer.
This poem has a beautiful meaning. It uses simple, but able to evoke feelings and a sense of love. The title of this piece encompasses all of your feelings for the person you are writing about. I like how you used the word “Lifetime” in both the title and the last line of the poem. This works to tie the whole thing together.
AMAZING!
AMAZING! Great Job!