The sweetest thing to have
The one thing that warms life
The company wished for
The creator of smiles, laughs, and memories
That we kick back and enjoy Oh so happily,
The one thing you can’t find too often
The one thing many fail in attempt to duplicate
The one thing when lost Getting it back is too late,
The one thing remembered When physically the one that gave it perish
The one thing that keeps you wishing It was only a mile to get to Heaven,,
The one thing took for granted When time seems so plentiful
The one thing once gone Causes the most pain,,,that’s so dreadful,,, LOVE.
Poetry
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The poem takes such a dramatic turn, called a volta. Unexpected! Well done!
Suggestions:
-Watch out for capitalization mid-sentence. Not sure if this is part of your writing style.
-Take the poem, remove the last two stanzas, read out loud. If you’re going for an impact with your audience, see if removing those last two stanzas creates said impact.
Awesome work!
Michelle R.
Thanks for the constructive criticism.