You always tell me my beauty takes your breath away. You say my personality blows your heart away, but all I can say is “I LOVE YOU”! You can always make my day better when you tell me that. I shall never LOVE anyone else. If I shall, I shall die a painful death. I tell you, you may LOVE again and I may not. When you ask why I shall say you need to find that answer out on your own.
-Snow Elizibeth
Poetry
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This is a nice piece. I can really feel the emotion from your words. I also like how you capitalized words like “LOVE”. It really helps creating a voice for your piece.
As for improvement, I want to see more in this piece. The speaker tells their significant other that they have to figure out why they love them so much. I want you to show me why they love them. All you’re doing is telling. In my opinion, showing not telling will strengthen your piece significantly.
Other than that, I loved reading your work!