I love the music of rain.
It washes the stain off my heart,
and in the process, I let go of my pain.
I then smile,
In this moment I forget about the past…for a while.
The smell of soaked leaves and wet mud send me to transcendence.
The sound of wet tires of cars passing by, give me a sense of calmness.
Somehow my nerves become steady,
In turn,
The forces around me, push me to be ready.
The feel of the wind lightly brushing past me casts a fixed spell on me.
Suddenly, I cease to move in a style of the norm, but rather dance in a style of the ‘Lively’.
The many aromas hidden in the depths of the wind,
trigger an unexplained rush to my veins.
My blood rushes, sending shock waves to my heart.
………. All at Once I feel spiritually, emotionally, physically, and mentally aware of my surroundings, It is here where I become Transfixed on the stimulation of ‘Life’.
Poetry
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One quick fix. Remove the comma in the “cars passing by, give me a sense” line. If you want the reader to pause at that point to keep the rhythm of the poetry, start a new line with the word “give.” That’s the only thing that stands out to me.
I love how immersive this poem is. “The sound of wet tires of cars,” “the smell of soaked leaves and wet mud,” “aromas hidden,” and “blood rushing,” are all captivating. What I enjoy the most is that you never described what something looked like directly, and yet I still get the most vivid image in my head. I like that you were able to convey the mood of exhilaration and freedom in nature that everyone experiences even though there’s no concrete word for “it.” Beautiful piece.