Ur hair has softened,
From the touch of the breeze
Come home my loved one,for thee
I miss your smile
You’ll laugh for a while
Ohh…when will u come home?
The trees swing
Where my feet are tingling
The water comes to me
I hate when it leaves me
Like u did
When that day came,i said goobye
In my holy name
I pray to The Lord about you
Hope you know ur important too
Poetry
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Nice poem. My favorite lines are the first two – I always love when descriptions lead to implied imagery. My only suggestion is to change all the “ur’s” and “u’s” to the full spelling. This distracts from your poem, especially when you use the full word in some lines and not others. That’s it. Good job!