We must save him I said and hit the table with my fist, we cannot let him fall.
We must not fail, we must succeed. Humpty Dumpty must live. We will do everything, we’ll go everywhere, we’ll fight every one, for Humpty not to fall. Dumpty will stay on the wall.
We don’t have the men and the resources for that, cry the generals.
It will take too much money and time complain loudly the politicians.
Nobody knows where Humpty is, we don’t even know if he is real, said the intelligence officers.
But I didn’t listen, that was my target, my goal. I wanted people to know my name.
In my mind I saw them, men and women old and young, pointing at me, he saved Humpty they will shout, he did it.
So, I took the finest soldiers the army can offer. The best equipment money can buy. We carry with us the most advance medication known in science.
Please stop cried the generals, we cannot protect our borders without our best soldiers.
Please don’t take such an expensive equipment, we don’t have the budget for that complain the politicians.
How can we save lives without our medications? Asked the doctors and the nurses.
Where are you going? Said the intelligence officer with a disrespectful voice. We told you and we are telling you again, humpty is not real.
Stop with your whining I said. we are going to do it, and that is my final decision.
We continued, the road was long.
We lost men when we fought through hostile countries.
We have lost even more in the scorching desert.
I left with only a handful of men after we cross the frozen tundra.
Most of our expensive equipment got lost or broken along the way. All the medications got spoiled.
Do you know where to go? The few men that were left asked me.
I hesitate with my answer, a horrible feeling came over me,
maybe I should have listen,
maybe I should have stop?
Do you really know where to go? they ask me again.
I wanted to tell them no, I got no idea where to go.
I never know where Humpty wall is.
I don’t even know if Humpty is real.
But instead I told them, I know exactly where he is. Very soon we will be able to see the wall.
We must continue we cannot stop, Humpty will not fall, Humpty will stay on the wall.
We push on, more and more until eventually I was left alone. The last man died cursing my name.
Finally, I also stopped. I had nothing left in me to continue. I sat down with my back against a wall. I’m completely empty, my spirit is broken. My body is crushed.
Just before I closed my eyes for the last time, I said to myself with a grim smile,
I found Humpty.
Humpty is real.
Humpty is real.
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This is an amazing piece! I absolutely love it. There are only two big issues. First one, is copy write. I am not sure since how copy write works for fan fiction, but it is something you want to investigate. Second, grammar. You have a lot of fragments, comma splices, and run on sentences. Easy fix, but they need to be fixed. Another thing, work on your dialog structure.
Sincerely appreciate your comments.
I will take all of them seriously.