“I don’t belong in this world, I want to be free, I need to let go and flee.” Those were the last words she said
‘Cause the next morning they found her dead.
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5 Comments on “Spoken Silence”
The delivery is stark and effective despite the fact that it’s a single stanza, well done. The broader topic is relative to many – a feeling of defeat – and should be discussed and written about often. There’s no room for any misinterpretation in your poem which I appreciate.
I don’t think the bolding and underlining are necessary because the word ‘dead’ carries so much power itself. If you want to be technical there should be an apostrophe for the omitted letters in because [ ‘Cause ] . Powerful work, keep up the writing!
Thank you.
I will fix that.
This gives me kind of a Dejavu, because in 5th grade, this sweet, nice, amazing 6th grader stood up for me against her friends. She was loved by all, and that year, no one knows why, but she hung herself. She was a beautiful Christian girl, and somehow the love of Jesus wasn’t enough.
RIP Samantha
Oh my…
I’m so sorry.
She sounds like an awesome person.
The delivery is stark and effective despite the fact that it’s a single stanza, well done. The broader topic is relative to many – a feeling of defeat – and should be discussed and written about often. There’s no room for any misinterpretation in your poem which I appreciate.
I don’t think the bolding and underlining are necessary because the word ‘dead’ carries so much power itself. If you want to be technical there should be an apostrophe for the omitted letters in because [ ‘Cause ] . Powerful work, keep up the writing!
Thank you.
I will fix that.
This gives me kind of a Dejavu, because in 5th grade, this sweet, nice, amazing 6th grader stood up for me against her friends. She was loved by all, and that year, no one knows why, but she hung herself. She was a beautiful Christian girl, and somehow the love of Jesus wasn’t enough.
RIP Samantha
Oh my…
I’m so sorry.
She sounds like an awesome person.
Rest In Peace
oh my