If you ever find me,
Tongue on my sweet tooth,
standing in line
for a crooked kissing booth.
Just know, I think of you.
thank you for the virtues.
I urge you to wear blue
and then you surprise me in white.
I do not want to waste it but I’m wasted.
7 years down and I’m back to the beginnings.
Sober for two weeks, been working on sinning.
I have weird memories,
we were taking pictures,
your face was so full of light
and mine the same as usual,
captured in the moment but I always look so far away.
Spent hours still and sour,
for a lonely mind to devour.
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Hmm. You have some really interesting lines here-“Tongue on my sweet tooth”, “thank you for the virtues”, “captured in the moment but I always look so far away” I really liked them and it made me perk up and wonder what you mean. But the poem as a whole is hard to decipher. They feel like parts of different poems put together. I would suggest finding a way to make all your points flow so they feel like one cohesive whole. You really have something thought-provoking here though.
I love your poem! The kissing booth is my favorite line! However, I suggest reading through your poem one more time. You have a few grammar errors.