I can say, “I’m not okay”
I can say,”I have lost all my days”…
I can cry and fill myself with hate…
and stubbornly say, “This was my fate.”
But…Instead, I’ll say, “I am okay…I am in liberation with the stones and knives that are waiting to subdue me in my own demise”
“For I am strong, For I am wise”,
“For I do not fear the world’s surprise.”
I’ll say, “I am in liberation with the pain and sadness…,
the frustrations, the madness.”
“For life is a place where warriors are made, not born,”
“So I’ll cease the self-tragic mourne.”
and proudly say, “My life is not a stage of forlorn.”
“By The Grace of God and His Almighty strength..,
“I shall prevail again…I shall fall again…. and then I WILL get right back up again.”
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This is just a boost everyone needs on a slow Tuesday evening or a long tiring week. Often times, I think we all have the habit of falling into this boring old rhythm of life that we often feel so dredged up and tired. I think in the midst of that everyday-ness, there can be this loss of motivation to keep on trying.
But I absolutely loved how it was the narrator self, and not anybody else, who got themselves out of thus funk. Perhaps, this could allude to depression or some other more serious mental health issue. Either way, to pick yourself up with self-praise and self-love, I think, sometimes can do us more good than any other medicine. I think truly believing in one’s self worth is a journey, and there is so much help that all of us can get- either in therapy or elsewhere. But at the end of the day, we have to take agency, look into the mirror, and speak to the imperfectly perfect self standing right in front of us. That is such a beautiful thing and your poem has encapsulated that wonderfully.
To understand pain, and use that as a tool to further one’s self growth, and the idea of will as both a noun and a verb, were such important and creative twists. I do have a question and of course this is an artistic choice, but why did you decide to put the voice of the poet in quotes?
Thank you so much! I appreciate the kind and detailed review. It means A LOT when people can find their own stories and history of similarity through my writing. To answer your question, I decided to put the voice of the poet in quotes because, initially it was about how I, myself was feeling at the time, but then i realized that we all go through this dry spell, this stage of hopelessness and loss of self- identity, so I decided to put it in quotes because it’s not just me, but millions of other voices singing the same song. the song of hardship and restlessness. I wanted to make sure who read this, that they felt connected to that voice, as authentic as possible.
Ahh! That makes this poem even more thoughtful. And it clearly resonated with me, as mentioned in my first comment! And you are clearly such a talented poet and I look forward to reading more of your works!
I enjoyed reading this poem. The dramatic mood change is impressive and interesting. It is a good skill to be able to do this. The beginning is serious and depressing, but the end becomes uplifting. I think a lot of readers are able to relate to the emotional concepts you portray in this piece.
Thank you so much! It brings me great pleasure, that you took the time to review my work and give me feedback. I hope to do the same in the future.
I really value the warrior spirit of this piece.
Thank you!! That is what i was aiming for. I wanted people to feel that pain and discomfort that they always feel, and i wanted them to channel that and make it their greatest strength. I wanted them to change that negativity to a positive experience.