I think this is nice! But it would be even better if you could make it slightly longer. I see that it is titled “The Rain”…maybe a connection to that would be really cool!
Simple and effective. I like the flow of the words, they go in perfect harmony.
Yes a dream remains a dream only if there is no effort to achieve it. Its depicted well.So far so good . Its not understood how rain is related to dream or efforts to make it work. Probably it require more to connect concepts and elements of writing.
I think this is nice! But it would be even better if you could make it slightly longer. I see that it is titled “The Rain”…maybe a connection to that would be really cool!
Simple and effective. I like the flow of the words, they go in perfect harmony.
Yes a dream remains a dream only if there is no effort to achieve it. Its depicted well.So far so good . Its not understood how rain is related to dream or efforts to make it work. Probably it require more to connect concepts and elements of writing.