Sometimes when I sit in sadness, i feel like Am Drowning in loneliness, or hiding In a tree house up in A mountain with a water fall around it that falls into the Sea. and when i get the feeling Of Desire to speak up i smile And stand up tall to The Only One That makes me feel like i Can do nothing , i go and Save myself from the voice inside of Me and that Is killing me, and i tell her ” You are no longer going to hurt me and im not going to listen to You!”
Credits to Christy Ann Martine for making the poem i made this poem out of.
Poetry
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I love how the italicized works makes their own poem when put together! So interesting, so many layers. Great job.
This is a very cool conceptual poem! I love the message at the end. However, make sure you proofread your poetry. A lot of this does not make sense as there are words missing. For example, you are missing the “I” between “like” and “am drowning.” Also, the poem within the poem does not make sense; I think a few words are missing. The first sentence reads well, but “And the can save me you” does not make sense and I am unable to fill in the blanks. With some fixing up, this will be an even better poem!
yea i know i left out some words, im going to fix. thanks for your comment anyways! and thanks for reading!
I really loved reading this…you have alot of talent!! Good job!!