When the fire came, it scared me.
Teenager’s, with fireworks, in a forest.
One mile from our town. Smoke.
A column blotted out the sky.
Evacuation. Be ready, they said.
Two days, it spreads,
I meet neighbors, watching,
as trees turn crimson red.
We leave our house, for safety.
An evacuation camp. Family,
cats, dogs, and even the chickens.
Days go by. Anxiety. Questions.
Smoke leaves us blind for two,
then we watch more ridges burn.
Every one in sight, but town remains.
Thank god for that, we go home.
A memory I’ll never lose.
Those days the fire raged.
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“day’s” at the end there should be “days.” Apostrophes can be confusing sometimes. I used to accidentally put in apostrophes because it “just felt/looked right.” You’ve got to take the time to ask yourself what you’re trying to say though. Do you mean to show personal possession? What about multiple possession (e.g. teachers’, as in “This is the teachers’ lounge.”)? Do you want to say “is” at the end (e.g. it is=it’s)? Just thought I’d leave a friendly little reminder for you because I’ve noticed you making a lot of the same mistake over again in your works. I hope this is useful to you! You’re a very talented writer, just gotta brush up on some grammatical conventions. 🙂
I appreciate the help. I tend to have to proof read my own stuff, which I know is not ideal, and it’s been a while since school. This is a new outlet of expression for me, but I sincerely appreciate your catching it and bringing it to my attention so I can fix it, and improve. Thank you!
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