I am always a sucker for stories that involve imaginary friends, so I was bound to enjoy this poem! I adore the general story behind this piece. I think that it is so heart-warming that Tommy wanted to let everyone know about his imaginary friend, Augusto, because it clearly shows how much he cares and loves him. I also thought it was interesting how you made Augusto “vanish” when “night came” because it indicates – and forgive me if I interpreted this way – that imagination ceases to exist in the dark, either because a child’s brain becomes fatigued at this point or because everything is less colorful and stimulating at night. It leaves the reader thinking, so I really liked that supplement detail towards the end.

Still, I do believe that this poem needs to be further revised and edited in order to make it even better and more comprehensible. For starters, there were several points over the course of the piece where I was confused because I had no idea which boy you were referring to. For example, in stanza two, you say “he” or “him” five times, and although I can make a guess as to who you are talking about, I was not absolutely sure. I was grasping at context clues, and you don’t want to do that to your audience because – 9 times out 10 – that will make them stop reading. That being said, I would go back and include Tommy and Augusto’s names more between the lines so the reader knows precisely who you are talking about.

Moreover, I have to confess that I was utterly lost as I was reading stanza three. From what I could gauge about this particular part of the poem, Augusto wanted to befriend Tommy’s friend, Tim, and the three of them played together into the night. I definitely feel like I missed out on integral details because of your word choice and syntax. For example, in line 3, you say, “Tim wanted this for Tommy to begin,”: to begin what? To begin maturing? To begin opening up to people? It is very unclear here, so I would recommend specifying exactly what you mean. Also, this is another stanza in which I was uncertain as to who you were referring to, and I think that there were a few instances where you unnecessarily repeated a word, so I would check back on that as well.

Regardless of my criticism, I do believe that this poem tells a beautiful story about the friendship between a boy and his imaginary friend. With a few more revisions, I am confident that this piece will be absolutely riveting. Keep working at it!