I feel the warmth of desire pull me in the dust of magic.
The heat… the electric….the glimmer of attraction.
oh, this is nothing but a distraction.
My stomach….all tied up in knots….., my heart beating hysterically,
and yet strangely, confusingly….I feel your silent whisper of passion pour down my soul.
Your gentle, unseen embrace sends shock waves to my body.
With one kind stare, you strip my thoughts bare.
You dive straight in to the pool of my emotions, and sink into the deepest, darkest parts of my soul.
With one swift movement you set my caged heart free.
By the Grace of God, I can finally breath… I can finally see……. that we’re meant to be.
Poetry
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Your use of metaphor is really powerful in this piece. Hope to read more!
The passion that you put into this piece is awesome – you use very powerful language to help us feel the intense emotions you are feeling. My suggestion would be to add more imagery to this piece so you are showing and not telling. This creates stronger poetry and the reader can picture what you are writing. Also, you use rhyme but not a standard rhyme scheme so the rhyming feels displaced and confusing. Consider taking out the rhyming or sticking to a formal scheme. Good job!