Such everlasting sadness
Draining the life out of me,
But when you walk in
I get this surge to look at you
Jus to remember
What we once had.
Now this everlasting sadness
Seems to not wanna go away.
You have changed
You seem to be a bit colder towards me.
This everlasting sadness won’t go away until I know my baby is back with me.
Everlasting Love once was there.
Now our everlasting love seems to be fading away fast.
Which I call it everlasting sadness now.
Please help me take it all away by jus being my baby, my husband, and my beat friend yet again.
Our everlasting love seems so far away now.
Where could it have gone?
Our Everlasting Love now to be our Everlasting Sadness.
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The final line was great.
I love the repetition of everlasting along with the illustration. I think this poem captures all the emotion of losing the one you love. What I would do to make it better is cut out some words and rearrange some of the lines to make it sound even more poetic.
But otherwise, very good.
Thank u for your comments. Im trying to get better at writing them.