8:30
Really? Another Friday night where no one can hangout and end up watching romance movies and feel sad about my loneliness. Its been two weeks since Abby, my best friend and my sister, left to go to college at Yale. Yes, I am happy for her, but I miss her so much. I don’t want to bother her when if she is stress with school work. And all my other friends are fake, but they kind of force me to hang out with them. But there is this one guy, his name is Darce. I like him, but i swear that everyone does. He is my friend, but I’m positive that he doesn’t like me.
I sit on my bed, grab my laptop and pull up my all time favorite love story movie, “the Notebook.” I cry every time. I sat down and sipped my coffee while I watch my movie. For the first time in forever I was bored, so i had no choice but look on my phone and text Abby. I was mid sentence of writing to her and i stop, i can’t text her. It’s a three hour time difference. I scrolled threw my contacts, and I see Darce’s name on the screen. When did I get his number? Okay, I’m lonely and I want to talk to some one. I send him a text, one simple text. And I believe that one text changed my life forever.
The simple one word text. i hesitated to send it, but i finally gave in and send it…
9:39
Me: hey
Uhh… great. Wait, are those dots? He was replying!
Darce: hey alex.
My real name is Alexa, but he is the only one who calls me Alex. I kind of like the name Alex, not because he calls me that… because its catchy. Wait? I need to respond, what should i say? Um… Crap what if he’s at his friends house… um… Oh what are you doing. Perfect?
9:45
Me: wyd?
Darce: Not much. I’m kinda doing nothing.
Darce: Wbu?
Me: Same i’m watching a movie by myself. lol.
Darce: lol yeah. none of my friends wanted to hang to out or they just couldn’t hangout.
Me: I’m not kidding, me too!
Wow, that’s weird. I thought he was popular. why did no one want to hangout with him? I’ve never seen him without someone in the halls or talking to girls.We used to be really good friends, then high school hit him like he was the most important guy ever. Everyone started hanging out with him, and i think he kind of forgot about me. He sometimes says hi to me when he sees me in the halls and in science class, but we haven’t had a real talk in so long. Maybe I could deep talk to him without going to his house.
9:54
Me: Hey, do you have anything to do tonight?
Darce: No. lol. why?
Me: i have nothing to do. i mean we haven’t talked in a long!
Darce: Yes we have, i always say hi to you in the halls.
Me: Ik, but that’s not the same. I mean like a real talk.
Darce: Yea I guess your right…
Wow. I am right Boston! Well, that went really well!
Me: okay, what do you want to talk about?
Darce: idk.
Me: Well, why did you stop talking to me?
Darce: Oh come on. Okay, ill be honest. The people i hang out don’t like you.
Me: Wow, ouch. That hurt.
Darce: Well, why do you think i stopped talking to you in general?
Me: Well, you hang out with “popular” kids and everyone girl is in love with you.
Darce: Really? I can bet that no one likes me.
Me: Um, well i know someone…
Darce: Who then?
Great, what did i get myself into? I should make up a name! I can’t tell him i like him. Well yes he is a really nice, understanding person, But he probably already has a girlfriend.
10:15
Darce: my point proven? you can’t think of anyone.
Me: to many to count. lol. this might be a weird question, but i haven’t heard anything about you in a while. what have you been up to?
Darce: Same old. Sports, games, and family. wbu?
Me: Well, my sister went to gale. Oh and my dad is taking my mom on a vacation soon.
Darce: i meant how are you.
Me: Well, to be honest. Kinda lonely. My sister was my best friend and my mom and dad are always at work.
Darce: you know you can talk to me about it. I really hate the crowd i hangout and, yes, how every girl falls at my feet.
Me: see i told you!
Darce: okay, this is also a strange question. But i’m trying to impress this girl to take her out. can you help me?
Um, okay. Thanks for asking the person who likes you for love advice, that makes them feel really great.
Me: in what why?
Darce: Well, what first dates would you want to go on.
Well i would like to go on a first date with you.
Me: well, i would want my first to be something special. I mean, if the relationship works out, you want to remember it forever.
Darce: well, what do girls like?
I LIKE YOU!! oh wow i need to calm down. Who ever it is, he is going to be with a great guy.
Me: Well, i would only go out with someone i know as a friend. I would love to drive to the mountains in the fall or spring , get candy, and talk and learn even more about them.
Darce: wow! now i have to ask someone out.
Me: okay.
Darce: Wanna go on a date?
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I really liked this piece. This was always my fantasy when I was in high school: a cute guy and I would text all night and he’d reveal his love to me. One suggestion: the dialogue didn’t feel super realistic to me. For example, I don’t think someone would really say “Do you want to text all night?” without the other person feeling pressured. And I don’t think someone would point out that all the non-deep questions have been asked. You slowly transition into those deep questions.
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