One day a sad man was very upset with his life. He put a few things in one bag including all his money and went out to find happiness.
He was just a block away that mulla came , he took his bag and disappeared. Sad man was very unhappy and searched all around but could not find that man.
After one hour he sat to rest and cried for help. Mulla came back and gave his bag back. He thanked him even it was
his bag.
That was his happiest day of life . That is why Mulla did it.
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This really blew me away, I loved how you incite so many emotions in few words. It’s so reflexive and provides the reader insight on what happiness could be if looked at from a different perspective, well done!
Here are some notes:
1. I love the idea of packing a bag to go search for something abstract like happiness.
One day a sad man was very upset with his life. He put a few things in one bag including all his money and went out to find happiness.
2. Without outright saying what a mulla is for people unaware of the word, you could reference religion in some way since commenting on appearance could be misconstrued.
He was just a block away that mulla came, he took his bag and disappeared. Sad man was very unhappy and searched all around but could not find that [holy, blessed, sacred, sacrosanct] man.
3. To improve flow.
He thanked him even [if] it was his bag.
I’m eager to read more of your work, keep it up!
Thanks.