At the peaks of a frosty mountain top
The edge of the sky humbly lies
Higher than where the tallest buildings stop
Far from where any bird flies
-That is where I dream to be;
Able to touch the passing clouds
I only wish that I was defined as free
Safely surrounded by misty shrouds
Forever lies beyond the Earth’s atmosphere
But I cannot reach so far
The cool midnight sky shows plain and clear
A vast and endless collection of stars
I wish I was able to touch their twinkling light
But I am bound here, only able to view them by night
Poetry
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Gorgeous poetry. You have a real gift
I love the dreamy feel of this piece! Your imagery is very strong and I was able to picture everything perfectly and imagine myself in this dreamland you created. My only suggestion would be to try this poem either without a rhyme scheme or with a more relaxed one. Because you are sticking to a formal scheme, you are boxed in and some phrasing sounds strange. For example, the line “I only wish that I was defined as free” makes sense but it does not flow as well as it could. Otherwise, this poem is great and I enjoyed reading it! I am just biased when it comes to rhyming because I was never a fan of it, so if you enjoy the formal structure then go for it! Looking forward to reading more from you.