She used to tell me she loved me
although she didn’t that’s for sure
but now that I know she loves me
She doesn’t tell me anymore
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One Comment on “HER LOVE”
I think your piece could be more heart-wrenching if you used enjambment. I like that you’ve capitalized “She.” It seems as though this person is important to the speaker’s life. The rhyme scheme is fun, too, which I personally enjoy. It keeps the reader at a bit of a distance from the speaker’s pain of loosing her, of course the reader is still pulled in nevertheless. Nice work!
I think your piece could be more heart-wrenching if you used enjambment. I like that you’ve capitalized “She.” It seems as though this person is important to the speaker’s life. The rhyme scheme is fun, too, which I personally enjoy. It keeps the reader at a bit of a distance from the speaker’s pain of loosing her, of course the reader is still pulled in nevertheless. Nice work!