We swear we won’t get ourselves in this mess again.
We deny ever having any feelings at all.
We tell ourselves that it was never meant to be.
We say they weren’t worth the hurt and the pain.
But at the end of the day we forget everything.
We forget the fact that for the past two years we loved like we’ve never loved before.
We put our hearts on the line and let them walk the thin rope.
We forget the smiles, and the laughs, and all the good times.
For the sake of moving on, we block out all the kisses, and hugs, and intimacy that was shared.
We forget, because its easier to forget, then to remember and realize that all those good moments, are never going to be real again.
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Such a devastating piece! Everyone can imagine what separation from a loved one must feel like: woeful, shocking, startling, anxiety-inducing, horrible. Yet, no one can accurately describe the sensation until you’ve experienced it, and this piece definitely gives the audience a significant impression of what that division is like. It’s not only the fact the two are not have to move on physically from each other, but also the wonderful memories of love and passion and bliss. “We forget the smiles, and the laughs, and all the good times… we block out all the kisses, and hugs, and intimacy that was shared”: lines such as these effectively demonstrate the magnitude of relationships and how it is not as simple as walking the door and saying farewell. The things that the couple went through together, especially the magical ones, resonate and so it will incredibly hard to come to terms that they “are never going to be real again.” I believe that you captured the emotional conflict that takes place after a break-up perfectly, and even for those who have not underwent that sort of turmoil, based on the language that you used and feeling within it, they are sure to comprehend.
(Suggestion: Get rid of the word “But” in Line #5. The word makes it sound as if the characters are doing something otherwise stated in the sentences prior, but really, they are following through with their promises to move on for the better. So either get rid of “But” or replace it with “And” because it emphasizes the continuation there.)
All in all, this was a very strong piece that leaves the reader feeling sympathetic towards this unknown couple’s former relationship, in spite of the fact that the reader knows almost nothing about them and their dynamic. Superb job!
Also, just a heads-up, you misspelled “Remembering” in the title!