Did you ever discuss your thing with his wife?
Yes. I said
How did you tell him? He asked me
I went to him/and I had a conversation about my feeling for his wife, immediately after I made an overt pass at her in a way that he and everyone in the room saw
What did he say when you told him
He threatened me in a way that only an insecure man can/ told him that I was not afraid and that I wanted my desire for her to stay in the domain of respect and character//that I crossed no lines and that none would be broken
What did he say?
He looked at me for a long time/said nothing then walked away
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You are a very good writer to be able to create such intricate scenes like this. They are almost like clips from a movie. I can definitely see you successfully writing a novel. However, I think it would be helpful if you put what the characters are saying in quotation marks so that it becomes more clear to the reader that there is a discussion going on.
I really appreciate the truly unique perspective provided by this particular piece. It’s not very often that the reader/audience is put in the position of the male equivalent of a mistress, or the one who attempts to drag someone in a committed relationship away, but this definitely puts a fun spin on things.