I could have chosen anything in the world, but I chose you. I had so many other chances, but I chose you. I went through hell, but I still chose you. I could have chosen anything in the world, but I didn’t. I chose you.
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This is so, so sweet! I love the repetition of the phrase “I chose you” because it not only enforces the idea that there the narrator was doubtless in his/her decision, but also it gives the reader a concrete impression of romance and love. This narrator, clearly, was presented with various opportunities. Still, although those choices probably would’ve been better in terms of success, and the narrator received a lot of backlash for his/her decision, he/she has absolutely has no regret. It is as if the narrator is royalty: he/she decided that he/she would rather strip him/herself of all the luxury in order to live side-by-side with his/her beloved – a commoner. This piece is heart-warming and potent and demonstrates the ultimate power of love, for we can’t help who we fall in love with nor are we willing let go of the feeling once we’ve had a taste of it.
If there is anything that I wish that you could done with this piece, it is MORE! Although I love the fact that someone can read this and slip into the narrator’s shoes, imagining that they are the narrator because the language is vague, the title “Chosen” makes me want to know WHY. Why did the narrator chose this person in spite of “so many other choices?” Why was this person compel the narrator to go “through hell” to be with them? Why was this specific someone the one? In other words, you should embrace your inner Shakespeare and turn this into a “Romeo and Juliet” balcony scene-like story. This piece is supposed to be romantic, so go full speed ahead and explain the audience why exactly the narrator got swept up in this individual and why only they could be the “Chosen” one. It will evolve this work from a declaration to a vow!