Not because I’ve done everything right
And not because I’ve done everything wrong
But just because life is a fight
And sometimes it will make you moan
I smile and keep my head up most of the time
I get hurt by others, talked about, and disrespected
I try hard to forgive others at the drop of a dime
But sometimes I hold unforgiveness and have to be corrected
I say “Amen” to the things I know is right or can relate to
Not because life has been so good to me
But because who would’ve knew
That life has many of things to see
Yes, I hurt sometimes, I cry, and I laugh but I hold on and keep going
Then there’s times when I want to run away and hide
But I tell myself to move on because life will keep blowing
And I can’t run and hide because of my pride
I think positive most of the time and that is that
And not because my mind or thoughts are always good
There are times I think negative but pray against that
Because praying is doing what I should
I can give in or up even run and hide
I can live and learn, do better and move on
I can keep moving with Jesus by my side
But whatever I choose its life and it will not postpone
Poetry
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I really like the sentiment, it’s heartfelt and emotional. If i could offer just a couple of suggestions on phrases or words (purely from my own point of view, of course) It may increase the emotion and also too, avoid a feeling of ‘forced rhyme’ in a couple of places
the last sentence in the first stanza ‘And sometimes it will make you moan’ I would have loved to seen something like “and sometimes you go it alone” or something like that.
again…..last stanza…..last line……..I would have loved to see something like
But whatever I choose its MY life, and I know I can go it alone”…..or I know I’ll be alright on my own…..
(showing the strength you are portraying throughout….
These are just my initial thoughts…not a criticism. Good poem. – Anita
Thanks Anita. Your suggestions are nice, I don’t mind criticism- it helps me to learn and do better. thank you so much