I had a dream, a dream that was soo amazing that it felt real
Although it was unbelievably a dream
A dream where everything was all good
A dream where although it sometimes rained and got tough,
There was no reason to ever complain
A dream of two individuals joining as one
Yes there were rainy days but together we create the sun
A dream where we could be doing absolutely nothing yet still it would be fun
There was a special connection where I absolutely loved every second
A dream where your touch was soo heavenly that we melt together
A dream of eternity because nothing breaks a bond of forever
You and I were meant to be together
Sun shinning in any weather with fingertips as light as feathers
A dream where our flaws were so small that to each other
They were nothing at all
Because our love defeats all
A dream where just like I do , you never hold the past against me
We help and encourage each other to succeed
This is the story of a dream
A dream of a true match made in heaven
Call it a dream team
Poetry
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I enjoyed this poem quite a bit for it’s whimsicality intertwined with real life feelings. The focus was maintained throughout the piece and it was structured really well, great work!
Here a few notes:
1. Consider mixing up the language in some parts.
Although it was unbelievably a dream
A dream where everything was all good
A dream where [despite an occasional rain shower and tough times],
2. This is really powerful and beautifully written.
A dream of two individuals joining as one
Yes there were rainy days but together we create the sun
3. I like how some of the rhyming lines are more subtle but extremely effective still, like this one:
There was a special connection where I absolutely loved every second
4. Considered writing in past tense for better flow for this line:
A dream where your touch was soo heavenly that we [melted] together
5. Minor spelling error.
Sun [shining] in any weather with fingertips as light as feathers
6. I love how the dream is not based around material things but instead that of positive and supportive themes between two individuals. The ending was playful and uplifting, excellent!
Because our love defeats all
A dream where just like I do , you never hold the past against me
We help and encourage each other to succeed
This is the story of a dream
A dream of a true match made in heaven
Call it a dream team
I look forward to reading more of your poetry 🙂 thanks for contributing!