She’d be blunt and be sharp, and can see in the dark. She’d be strong on the surface but soft in her heart. Its a shame that a dame with a face made for fame, should remain in this state of disgrace and of blame.
But you wont see her cry. All her scars she will hide. Like the type from a knife at the top of her thighs. They’ll most likely be right behind both of her eyes. And despite wrong or right shes polite all the time. Many might see just slightly and lightly pay mind.
Shes probably bothered by thoughts of no father and constantly doggin herself like a martyr. Shes me only smarter and needs me like water and keeps me at peace a relief when my heart hurts.
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Whoa, I LOVE this! When I first started to read I thought “hey incorrect grammar” but then I began to read it aloud and saw that your misuse of grammar went perfectly with the piece. It flowed very nicely and I am impressed with the way you form sentences. My only real critique is I think the ending falls a little flat. That’s just because “hurts” doesn’t seem to rhyme with anything so it sorta hangs off. But other than that I believe it is solid.
yeah, I will sacrifice grammar for rhyme everytime. everyone of my pieces is like that, I started out writing them as rap when I was 12 but then realized that it was all a form of venting. That’s why they sometimes fall flat at the end cus after I let out the emotion I cant fake an ending very well, and it sucks in that I cant go back and edit very well since I already let it out and cant get my mind back to that setting. I am a rhyme sceme fanatic but I can improve my craft so thank u for ur help