"Where there is a will there is a way"
Forty one years ago, the decisions we made,
the rewards we got …. is history.
Get up, see the birds, fresh air … cold…
what a day!
Still you can choose …. 1o minutes… Walk……
Where there is a will, there is a way!!
General
This was an intimate story for you to tell and I appreciate you giving others an insight into how some lives are constructed, i.e. arranged marriages and decisions made around married life. For people from the U.S. and other nations, this concept is very much foreign and often seen as something that is forced upon people, but in reality many enjoy this arrangement and keeping that tradition. Perhaps you could elaborate more on the location of the marriage or caste of family you come from to give even more depth to your history. Also, talk about what you’re studying earlier on in the piece and why you chose that subject. The opening line is especially strong and has a unique point of view because some might say their parents only have such an ability to plan until a certain point, but others would agree that they play a critical role in their children’s life choices up to adulthood.
Here a few things to consider:
1. Formatting and spacing. Without reading and at first glance the story is a bit confusing because of the irregular spacing and lack of paragraphs. Try grouping thoughts together, skipping lines to separate paragraphs, and using indentations. English is a very tricky language to grasp, but formatting will help in its delivery.
2. What kind of things did you like to do? Elaborate to give the reader more insight into your character.
=== All day I was home all alone doing things I liked
3. I like the detail here of writing on a ‘white sheet of paper’ well done!
=== I wrote my resume on a sheet of white paper and went to give that sheet to principal of college by hand
4. Again, English is tricky and sometimes the use of articles can be confusing. Without them however the text because a bit choppy. You will improve that skills with time and reading more content.
=== I told the guy to sit in our drawing room and offered him a glass of water and he left in [the] scorching heat on his bicycle
=== I wrote my resume on a sheet of white paper and went to give that sheet to [the] principal of [the] college by hand
5. A simple rule when specifying a person’s age when followed by a noun. Use hyphens to connect the number and ‘year’ ‘old’.
=== 3 year old son [3-year-old son]
6. Why did you resign? The story is very intriguing and leads the reader to want to know more, great job!
=== I could not sleep that night and next day went to school and resigned
This is a really solid start to telling your life story and I can tell it’s a fascinating one, so keep up the great work!
Thank u very much Cdeparis. Learning English is a bit difficult. But I am trying my best.