This is a really visceral poem. You did a great job imposing vivid imagery into every line. Great poem!
I’ve always enjoyed poems revolving around nature, so this does not disappoint! I like the simplicity of the title “bloom” (I’m always a sucker for a poem that has a one word title) and I think it works well with your piece. The imagery is strong here but I do have one suggestion. This is pretty specific but I think that this poem would be even better if you incorporated some color. You do not mention a single color in this poem, so I am unsure what these petals and flowers actually look like. I find that with nature imagery, color is a necessary factor. Adding color to your story would make the imagery even stronger and will help the reader imagine the scene that you are painting.
This is a really visceral poem. You did a great job imposing vivid imagery into every line. Great poem!
I’ve always enjoyed poems revolving around nature, so this does not disappoint! I like the simplicity of the title “bloom” (I’m always a sucker for a poem that has a one word title) and I think it works well with your piece. The imagery is strong here but I do have one suggestion. This is pretty specific but I think that this poem would be even better if you incorporated some color. You do not mention a single color in this poem, so I am unsure what these petals and flowers actually look like. I find that with nature imagery, color is a necessary factor. Adding color to your story would make the imagery even stronger and will help the reader imagine the scene that you are painting.