Haven’t you’ve seen this beauty before?
you’ve been wondering what life’s like.
never mind your crazy world I give it a score
because you’re so beautiful I’m being polite.
Hey, girl hey girl,
now, don’t you frown?
you mean the world
they turn your frown upside down.
Because…
I say you’re so beautiful.
no there are no refunds,
but you’ve become so magical.
I want you in my life girl,
you’ve been so unhappy.
now, why don’t you come here girl?
so I can make you so happy.
Why don’t you just c’mon a little closer,
I’m saying you’re so beautiful.
looks can be deceiving I ain’t-a poser,
so please take your time girl.
I’ve seen you down and hurting lately,
why can’t you be yourself again?
no please no put down that knife, please.
don’t commit suicide, my friend.
You’re so beautiful to me,
and I wanna see you alive.
you’ve made me unhappy,
seeing you taking your life.
Well, my friend,
you’ve made it so clear.
you’re unhappy and so sad,
looks like the pain isn’t unclear.
So don’t slip off that chair hanging,
baby girl why don’t you stay alive?
you’re ten feet off the ground choking
and don’t you care about your life?
So you’ve taken your life suddenly,
but I say you’re so beautiful.
so why are you so unhappy lately?
those tears running down I see the facial.
Poetry
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This is a very powerful poem, especially to readers who are dealing with self positivity. For suggestions, I feel like the tone of this poem might be too light. Whenever the speaker says “girl” it makes me feel that the speaker isn’t truthfully unhappy that the girl is hurting herself. I also feel like this poem is unfinished. The stanza felt like a cliffhanger. I suggest making the poem into a sadder tone and write about why the girl feels so poorly about herself. Also add in why she shouldn’t feel that way.