I feel like a hole of emotions.
I feel numb but feel everything all at once.
I’ve got all these thoughts in my head. All these notions.
They’ve been coming back more frequently for months.
But I still check on everyone else.
Before, or even if, I check on myself.
Poetry
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I really enjoyed this poem! When the speaker talked about feeling numb but everything at once it created a nice paradox. Also, I loved how you chose to put the title of your work in your piece. It really shows how the speaker cares for others before themselves. Again, I loved your poem; however, I had a hard time understanding the meaning of your work as a whole. I think the best way to fix this is to expand your poem. I really liked what you have done so far. Keep going!
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your feed back and am glad you enjoyed it!
The premise of this poem is really raw and I can see the potential for more. But I do feel like you have an untapped reserve of emotion that you’ve barely scratched the surface of. For example, you begin the poem by saying you “feel like a hole of emotions” – What does this look like? Are you sucking in emotion or expelling them? Can you describe what those emotions are?
Also when you write “all these thoughts in my head. all these notions” – What are those thoughts? I can only assume that these thoughts are compelling you to have certain notions so what are they. I feel like you have the start of something very compelling, you just need to fully encapsulate what you mean.
The title of your poem and its meaning is really introspective and thoughtful. If you dive deeper into the emotions that brought you to write it, I think you will have hit your mark.