Good company is hard to find. Those who would love for a second, start here and follow the foxes to the hills. Albeit the love is red, the sheets are green; it will leave you an unfulfilled thing. We must make a stand, search until we find a fruitage, that makes any meal better when accompanied. Fine treasures are abundant, but a loyal friend is more valuable than a fleet of gold.
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I really love this! There is so much vivid imagery, and the images that flood through the readers mind are laced with emotion, which helps them to understand your overall message even further. For instance, in the third sentence, you say, “Albeit the love is red, the sheets are green, it will leave you an unfilled feeling,” indicating that, while nature is vibrant and full of color, it also is a little too abundant for mankind, who anticipates company and being surrounded by people. The reader is compelled to envision an expansive hill full of reds and greens, as well as the mass of unoccupied space. In other words, even though the best option when you are frustrated with the world and its inhabitants seems to be to run away, it is only a temporary fix. You will get bored and lonely, so really, the true solution is to keep looking for a friend. Not everyone is going to be your perfect – that much is a given – but as you claim so eloquently: “…a loyal friend is more valuable than a fleet of gold.” When you find someone that serves as good company, he or she will make your whole life more pleasurable, more fun, more tolerable – more meritable. Seriously, I believe that the way in which you articulate the value of good company is lyrical and very, very spot on. This is a piece that a reader will agree with and will also stimulate them to broaden their eyes a bit more, just in case there is someone nearby that seems like a genuinely good person.
I do have one bit of advice for you, and that is to proofread. There were a couple of times where I found myself distracted because of a misspelled or an omitted word. Evidently, the last thing you want to do is impede the audience’s reading experience because of a slight error, for that forces them to work a little harder in order to completely understand the work. That being said, I firmly believe that you should re-read this work one or two more times so that you can recognize these errors. I’ll list a few that I found:
1) Sentence 2: You misspelled the word “Those.”
2) Sentence 3: The phrase “…it will leave you an unfilled thing” is a bit awkward. I would revise this to either “it will leave you AS an unfilled thing” or “it will leave you FEELING LIKE an unfilled thing.”
All in all though, I can confidently say that this is an incredibly strong piece that is wise, potent and influential! Bravo, my friend!